femgenficathon

This is nice, the writing is good and the look at Narcissa interesting. I do think it could be as well-served without the sex scene, or perhaps if it were written much more obliquely or mentioned in a flashback. I personally do think you can have sex in a genfic, but it should balance against the rest of the story and for a short story like this, I'm not sure if it doesn't take up too much space. Just my opinion, though.