Oh my god, I can hardly believe someone wrote about Alice. That makes me very happy. And this is a lovely, believable sketch of her. And of Cora, by contrast. Nicely done.
My one criticism - since you asked - is a small inconsistency. At one point you have Munro pulling Alice away from the man who fell off the roof; later, you say that Munro never protected her, that it was always Cora. But, like I said, it's a small thing.
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Date: 2006-09-15 08:40 pm (UTC)My one criticism - since you asked - is a small inconsistency. At one point you have Munro pulling Alice away from the man who fell off the roof; later, you say that Munro never protected her, that it was always Cora. But, like I said, it's a small thing.