I can't comment on any of the usual fanfic issues, as I don't know the canon (or even the history, very well). But I like the piece - a strong, distinctive voice with a lot implied without being said openly.
My one niggle is that I'm not sure about the Shakespeare quotes - or may it's just that they'd work better in italics than brackets. They seem to disrupt the flow a bit, without feeling like section headings. But I do very much like the mixture of self-knowledge and desperate self-justification. Not a happy woman, but an interesting one - at least from a safe distance!
I lolled shamelessly at the Livia reference, being an 'I, Claudius' fan...
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Date: 2007-10-14 09:35 pm (UTC)My one niggle is that I'm not sure about the Shakespeare quotes - or may it's just that they'd work better in italics than brackets. They seem to disrupt the flow a bit, without feeling like section headings. But I do very much like the mixture of self-knowledge and desperate self-justification. Not a happy woman, but an interesting one - at least from a safe distance!
I lolled shamelessly at the Livia reference, being an 'I, Claudius' fan...