Excellent, lovely little fic. I really like the sparseness of it, and you manage something that's really difficult in a short story with experimental narrative: we actually understand what happens and where the characters come from! I think that's a mark of very mature storytelling. It does get confusing with the she/she, but that again is the point of the story, that to most people, there is no difference between them. Please write more!
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Date: 2005-08-11 04:03 am (UTC)